Feedback from pitch

 After pitching Fred, Perdy, and mine powerpoint slides of our opening sequence pitch we received positive and negative feedback from our teachers. 

Instead of using two locations, one inside the car and the other inside the Ewhurst house, we have been advised to stick to using only the car as it is more practical and less complicated. The car would be stationary now through the whole opening sequence and it will stay put on a car park. 

Our idea of the sequence opening with a sound effect of the car engine was liked by my teacher, however, we have changed it so that the sound effect will be of the car door closing as the bodyguard in the front passenger seat enters. We have decided that the sequence will now start with the bodyguard in the cr initially preparing to assassinate his boss. The audience will have an insight into him preparing and loading his gun, in order to show that he is a bad man. We will include details of his signet ring and brick phone to reinforce the idea that he is bad. Then, the business man enters the backseat of the car while they wait for the driver. In this time, the audience has already been given hints as to what is going to happen, so there is a sense of tension before the assassination. To re create a gun shot scene, we are going to use a newspaper which the business man in the back seat would of been reading. This allows us to be creative and perhaps make a hole with fake blood through it to convince the audience that he has been shot by his own bodyguard. We have also decided to cut out the idea of using the other location to shoot the big boss in, so instead we will just have a short, quick shot of the bodyguards boss answering the phone, saying one or two short words in order to limit dialog. 

I agree with these adjustments that we have made to our idea pitch and I think that it will now be more realistic and accessible to film on the day.